The major change for this version is the inciting incident, from a briefcase of sand to a briefcase of water. It makes more sense for MX-93’s circuitry to go haywire from water rather than from sand, although the sand ties into the last scene for the narrative loop. But water has richer symbolic properties: baptism, renewal, rebirth, purification, genesis, and works as foreshadow of the Heaven scene.
Things I still want to address: the Heaven scene dialogue, a beat of relief after he arrives in Heaven (before the dialogue), more interaction between MX-93 and the skeleton birds, the CU of the briefcase in room (flashback edits), a CU as he picks up briefcase in sand (slo mo), a CU on his face before he steps through the door.
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